Camellias ii

Warmth of late August
Soaked into patio paving
Heats our tanned feet
You take my hand
Lead me back

To the shadowed lawn
Still compressed
Where we had been
Sculpting joy
The night before

A blackbird
(Hidden by heavy pink blooms)
Sang to us
Of eternal love
As Venus pierced
Night's deepening blue


n.b. NaPoWriMo 2023. Day 30 prompt: a palinode.

This poem, I hope, balances the sadness of shadows implied previously.

This link gives some background on camellias and related symbolism of this ornamental tree..

And so we move deeper into 2023, a year that feels to be moving as fast as any I have ever lived. Adieu x

CLP 30/04/2023


  1. Arti Jain says:

    Love the sense of longing in this poem. This piece feels like a lover’s sigh–ethereal and eternal.
    The phrase ‘Sculpting joy’ is special.

    1. Thank you Arti. It just fell out of the keyboard somehow.

  2. Lovely, Chris. Uncomplicated and limpid, the way a love poem should be.

    1. Thank you. Memories of warmer times!

  3. kim881 says:

    I agree with Jane and Arti. I love how you captured the warmth of late August with so few words in the patio paving and tanned feet, Chris, and the contrast between the two stanzas of sun and shadow. The blackbird hidden by blossom is a bonus.

    1. Thank you for your thoughts, Kim. I like the idea behind this prompt, a sort of buy one get one free offer!

    1. Glad you enjoyed it! Thank you

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